Amazing place to visit and you should also make this post a similar place :p . You tried well But i would like to add a few points.

Write your story in short paragraphs. Keep switching between paragraphs. Try to use meaningful pictures, and if you want to use them in a bulk, try to align them in the best possible manner and add little description :) I am sure this would make your post a great publication. And add a little more words too.

Hope you are fine now by the grace of Allah :)

TIP:

• Add Date in the title of Diary games :)

Note From The Country Representative Of Pakistan:

From the bottom of my heart, I want to take this community to the one of the best country communities on Steemit. I am sure you'd be by my side to take this Community to higher levels.

Country Representative Pakistan and Admin STEEMIT PAKISTAN.
Haidermehdi.
Steem On!