Steemit Open Mic Week 70 - Skeletal Umbrella by @bennettitalia

This week I experimented with adding homemade "drums", lead guitars, and layers of backing vocals... which kind of ended up being a bit of a mess šŸ™„ It can be very difficult to add drums after the fact, especially when using an empty plastic jar for a kick, a pen and the side of a guitar for a stick/snare, and a shaker for a hi hat.

My first attempt, with a song called "Something Awful", came out sounding great! I'm super happy with it. It's a brand new song, and aside from the fact that my brief stint in the Songwriters' Challenge seems to have honed my writing skills a bit, the mix came out pretty sweet sounding for something thrown together using a video soundtrack šŸ¤£ I added a second acoustic guitar playing melodic hooks over the top, as well as an electric guitar solo. I think it's the best thing I've done on Steemit so far. Check it out at the Steemit Talent Contest here: @bennettitalia/steemit-talent-contest-week-3-something-awful-an-original-song-by-bennettitalia

Skeletal Umbrella on the other hand... well I can't even tell at this point, I've had my ears glued to my computer speakers all day, trying to get a listenable mix šŸ˜œ

I like this song a lot though, so hopefully it works. If not I'll have to try again at some point... without the homemade drums!

"Skeletal Umbrella" was written in response to Rihanna's song "Umbrella", and is about the entertainment industry and its use (abuse?) of creatives.

Want to listen to more Steemit Open Mic entries, or enter one of your own? Check it out at: @luzcypher/steemit-open-mic-week-69-record-your-performance-and-win-steem-sponsored-by-pfunk-and-luzcypher

Big thanks as always to @luzcypher, @pfunk, @meno, @passionground, @soundlegion, @verbal-d, @jessamynorchard, @krystle (I hope I'm remembering everyone!)

Skeletal Umbrella

Skeletal umbrella just the bare bones
And the rain keeps falling the rain keeps falling
This spiderweb just scatters crystal drops round
And the rain keeps falling the rain keeps falling

So underdeveloped so overexposed
She shines in the limelight
All eyes on her
Stargirl
Do as you're told
And it'll be alright
A priestess must never be

Touched by tears
That Heaven cries
Paper thin
These alibis
Paper money paper dolls
Paper hearts and paper souls
All melt away when the rain comes

Skeletal umbrella just the bare bones
And the rain keeps falling the rain keeps falling
It's casting shadows all around your mind now
And the rain keeps falling the rain keeps falling

And it looked so good on paper when he got
The offer he couldn't kill
What choice did he have
After all?
His life in their pockets
Now he's left standing naked

In these tears
That Heaven cries
Paper thin
His alibis
Paper money paper dolls
Paper hearts and paper souls
All melt away when the rain comes

So never let them say you're too far gone
That they own your soul now
It's just the same old tired Prince of Lies
He speaks with many mouths
All you feelers
healers
Take these tears that Heaven cries
Hold on tight and say goodbye
To paper money paper dolls
Paper hearts and paper souls
All melt away when the rain comes
All melt away when the rain comes

When the rain comes

Ā©2018 Bennett Italia

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